tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post16280919362187005..comments2024-03-28T16:06:50.879+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: What Next? by Ceinwen HaydonCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-78557409508326369002015-06-14T07:35:29.217+01:002015-06-14T07:35:29.217+01:00This held me rapt throughout...or should that be w...This held me rapt throughout...or should that be wrapped...as my arms tightened around me and I read on...only relaxing at the story's conclusion...however the mental images will take longer to unfold as the blurring of creative writing and the previously suppressed memories of reality have merged dangerously close together...a roll-up and a cup of tea I think...but no bathroom visits for a while at least. YoBroYoBronoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-90236192120751380742015-06-14T07:15:15.134+01:002015-06-14T07:15:15.134+01:00Thank you Beryl, Mike and 'frefu 1' for ta...Thank you Beryl, Mike and 'frefu 1' for taking the time to read my story, and for your generous comments and encouragement, <br />CeinwenAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-76196699589667189072015-06-12T15:14:38.910+01:002015-06-12T15:14:38.910+01:00I liked the use of a first person "unreliable...I liked the use of a first person "unreliable narrator" and the mixing of tenses. It brought the reader into Jane's disturbed and troubled mindset. Part of me wanted even more sordid details but the minimal nature of the writing kept it from turning it melodramatic.or sensationalist,Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05191989247329577169noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-19590735472578402492015-06-12T12:36:37.847+01:002015-06-12T12:36:37.847+01:00First class writing! It has the disturbing ring of...First class writing! It has the disturbing ring of truth to it. I hope not.!<br />It´s been a long journey for Jane but is it really over? It certainly seems like it. I hope so.!<br />Well done<br /><br />Mike McCAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-72461086126418682352015-06-12T11:40:14.833+01:002015-06-12T11:40:14.833+01:00Well done, Ceinwen! Well planned and well written...Well done, Ceinwen! Well planned and well written; you've obviously done your homework and put much thought into the writing of this story. It's not the kind where one can say "I enjoyed this," but it certainly holds the writer's interest from start to finish. It tackles a difficult subject too, which takes courage. Keep writing!<br />Beryl<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com