tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post3322389826216043719..comments2024-03-28T08:51:20.299+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: The Bastard by Adrian KalilCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-86011397424407748082013-05-10T21:39:00.840+01:002013-05-10T21:39:00.840+01:00I felt the pain of a hopeless situation. It that i...I felt the pain of a hopeless situation. It that is the writer's intention, he had succeeded. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-68947737347080964162012-06-02T03:20:15.633+01:002012-06-02T03:20:15.633+01:00A not unfamiliar family scenario, hopefully not fu...A not unfamiliar family scenario, hopefully not fully autobiographical. Adrian tells a touching, sad tale in beautiful prose well crafted to elicit both empathy and sympathy from the reader. A common problem in writing in first person is to try to minimize use of personal pronouns, "I", "we", etc. which sometimes requires butcher grammar somewhat.Gary Cliftonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-24706332803600579472012-06-02T03:07:30.812+01:002012-06-02T03:07:30.812+01:00A not unfamiliar family scenario written with some...A not unfamiliar family scenario written with some beautiful prose. A family disintegration, straight from the heart, hopefully not fully autobiographical. Adrian stikes several nerves in a yarn well crafted to elicit empathy and sympathy alike.Gary Cliftonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-56559287423818533302012-06-02T03:00:28.784+01:002012-06-02T03:00:28.784+01:00A not so unfamiliar family scenario, delivered her...A not so unfamiliar family scenario, delivered here in some very good prose. Fanily pressures described in solid but descripttive language. Written to elicit maximum sympathy and empathy for many who have experienced similar disassters. A difficulty in writing in first person is to try to minimize use of personal pronouns by butchering grammer a bit sometimes. A good read from the heart and hopefully not totally auto-biographical.Gary Cliftonnoreply@blogger.com