tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post6130474622686688553..comments2024-03-28T08:51:20.299+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: Am I Missing Something? by James McEwanCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-41513230315419598162015-02-09T05:27:11.373+00:002015-02-09T05:27:11.373+00:00Good one, and an excellent ending, too. Best of lu...Good one, and an excellent ending, too. Best of luck to Malcolm and to all of us in this game called love.Tony Acarasiddhi Presshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14808091702243409739noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-74758272348553151592015-01-31T23:53:05.140+00:002015-01-31T23:53:05.140+00:00yes. Pulled me right in. Great choice of detail. I...yes. Pulled me right in. Great choice of detail. I like when short fiction feels bigger and fuller than it seems its word count should allow.<br />:) Michael King<br />makhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16952371794165783653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-65877702669237035412015-01-20T15:45:15.444+00:002015-01-20T15:45:15.444+00:00Well done! I felt for Malcolm in this flash story....Well done! I felt for Malcolm in this flash story. I actually let out a little cheer when he didn't propose! Great character development.Danielle Bordelonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-75395628317792795792015-01-05T20:26:42.191+00:002015-01-05T20:26:42.191+00:00Good character development. I liked the way you d...Good character development. I liked the way you developed sympathy for Malcolm from the first sentence. Spending the last of his savings on a gift, how can we not admire that. . . Well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-84324313832988540072015-01-01T16:05:42.646+00:002015-01-01T16:05:42.646+00:00Hi Kathleen, thank you for reading and commenting....Hi Kathleen, thank you for reading and commenting. The idea of Malcolm even considering about proposing to Jean is the message of this short story, where love is blind. Many thanks, James.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-7360174119146555712014-12-16T16:29:21.968+00:002014-12-16T16:29:21.968+00:00Very nice writing. Particularly liked our first ac...Very nice writing. Particularly liked our first actual glimpse of Jean. She's too interested in the Eastenders to bother answering her door. Heh. I'm afraid I didn't wonder too much about the content of the final text. I was too busy trying to grasp why Malcolm would even think about proposing in the first place.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-19580402137845775842014-12-15T08:42:48.405+00:002014-12-15T08:42:48.405+00:00Thank you all for reading and your comments. I was...Thank you all for reading and your comments. I was pleased that the piece was entertaining as human relationships do travel well. As in real life there are misconceptions as to how seriously people feel about each other and it takes a touch of reality to snap them out of their infatuation. If Malcolm asked Jean, would she have taken the diamond and run? The message - There are plenty of other fish in the sea-. Many thanks James.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-16359297135637416852014-12-14T16:13:33.160+00:002014-12-14T16:13:33.160+00:00I'm with both Michael and Ceinwen - and more s...I'm with both Michael and Ceinwen - and more so, as Michael, would love to know what was in that text - though I think the last couple of lines sprinkle just the right amount of hint to get the picture (and the sprinkles smell much better than garlic breath...) Well done.Jim Bartletthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03429957545169700110noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-1919432051140748672014-12-14T11:51:12.213+00:002014-12-14T11:51:12.213+00:00first class! agree with Ceinwen, poor old, bumblin...first class! agree with Ceinwen, poor old, bumbling Malcolm seemed destined to make the biggest mistake of his life. I´d love to know what Jean said in her message!<br />well done<br /><br />Michael McCarthyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-88921213099978338122014-12-14T09:32:59.676+00:002014-12-14T09:32:59.676+00:00HI James,Y
ou hauled me right in there from the be...HI James,Y<br />ou hauled me right in there from the beginning of the story: I was immediately involved with Malcolm and cared what happened to him. To an equal extent I felt that Jean should come with a health warning from the first my first encounter with her. Thank goodness our hero saw sense! Extremely well told and engaging, many thanks,<br />CeinwenAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com