tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post7224558994015640344..comments2024-03-28T08:51:20.299+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: The Scuggins Girl by Max DetranoCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-23607883706394677632014-04-27T17:51:50.002+01:002014-04-27T17:51:50.002+01:00I was so scared for Kirby, I was actually biting m...I was so scared for Kirby, I was actually biting my nails around the end. Can't even imagine what a parent would feel in such a situation. When I was a kid, I rode my bike down a hill and my mum freaked out, she forbade me from ever riding a bike or playing any sport. So glad Kirby got lucky. This is a great story about peer pressure. I also like that the adults were included, the description was top-notch. This is the second story by Max Detrano I'm reading and I love it. Ethan Regalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14064777162768802306noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-57798485498896980242014-03-09T02:26:29.242+00:002014-03-09T02:26:29.242+00:00Thanks you all for the nice comments. I appreciate...Thanks you all for the nice comments. I appreciate it!Max Detranohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01302765944390724648noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-35848544484023508842013-11-10T00:20:02.226+00:002013-11-10T00:20:02.226+00:00builds fear!builds fear!Pamelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05946308980206108558noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-79054518503940626522013-11-08T23:08:00.745+00:002013-11-08T23:08:00.745+00:00Pretty good for such a short story. Reminds me of ...Pretty good for such a short story. Reminds me of when I was a kid.Diana Corbitthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07522266335240837738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-21846240308947729912013-10-16T16:59:57.614+01:002013-10-16T16:59:57.614+01:00When I was a kid, bike races (along with dirt clod...When I was a kid, bike races (along with dirt clod wars) were used to settle disputes and determine who held the "power" in our ragtag neighborhood gang. What makes this story fresh is the addition of the adults, with their own insecurities and a need to prove something. Enjoyed it!Pam Van Dykhttp://pamvandykwrites.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-14332458334639633822013-10-15T08:11:10.447+01:002013-10-15T08:11:10.447+01:00peer pressure, this time he was lucky. doesn´t hel...peer pressure, this time he was lucky. doesn´t help when the parents behave like children. liked it, a lot of description in a short piece.<br />true Flash fiction.<br /><br />Michael McCarthyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com