tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post8600338530142419553..comments2024-03-28T16:06:50.879+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: Kinship by Ceinwen HaydonCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-47458194156978694482016-11-27T16:07:54.049+00:002016-11-27T16:07:54.049+00:00I thought the pacing and movement between points o...I thought the pacing and movement between points of view in this story were brilliant. That's a very difficult thing to do and you did it beautifully!Julie Carpenterhttp://www.sacredchickens.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-1944661706544735172016-11-19T17:43:54.696+00:002016-11-19T17:43:54.696+00:00Many thanks for your kind and generous comments, L...Many thanks for your kind and generous comments, Louisa, Mike, Nancy, Sharon and Jim. Your encouragement keeps me going when I am stuck for words and beyond,<br />Ceinwen<br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11145727006327466838noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-35995369358667312782016-11-19T01:57:36.676+00:002016-11-19T01:57:36.676+00:00I second both Mike and Nancy - brilliant phrasing,...I second both Mike and Nancy - brilliant phrasing, wonderful writing, and the sections/"chapters" really gave it an extra edge. I normally don't care for multiple POV but this story was all the better for it. <br />Nicely done.<br />JimAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-9816784635696815802016-11-19T00:23:51.648+00:002016-11-19T00:23:51.648+00:00This is a terrific story! I absolutely loved it. ...This is a terrific story! I absolutely loved it. It will stick with me for a long time. Congratulations on a beautifully written story!<br />Sharon Frame GayAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-61730917614488109052016-11-18T16:49:48.841+00:002016-11-18T16:49:48.841+00:00A beautiful story. I love the sections and the mul...A beautiful story. I love the sections and the multiple POV. As Mike pointed out, brilliant phrases. I especially like, "but he'd worn sadness like an old vest." Thank you.Nancy Lanenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-35789765234238935752016-11-18T14:05:31.665+00:002016-11-18T14:05:31.665+00:00a powerful piece of writing Ceinwen, as usual. Pas...a powerful piece of writing Ceinwen, as usual. Past events echoing down the years. Some brilliant phrases, to mention but one: The colours from the TV flickered over their faces and reminded Rachel of flames cast from the autumn bonfires of her post-war childhood. Food for thought. <br />Well done<br /><br />Mike McCAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-1749532053212154262016-11-18T08:58:23.122+00:002016-11-18T08:58:23.122+00:00Oh wow, this is brilliant! An epic story. It's...Oh wow, this is brilliant! An epic story. It's told skilfully and poetically. I really enjoyed it. Thanks, Ceinwen!Louisa Campbellnoreply@blogger.com