tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post1534264261716936904..comments2024-03-28T16:06:50.879+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: Commitment by Kara BurkeCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-87635254223000157642017-05-15T20:57:41.088+01:002017-05-15T20:57:41.088+01:00Love how intense this story is! Would be great to ...Love how intense this story is! Would be great to act out as a skit! Think about it! :) Keep writing! <br /><br />Sam P.Sam P.https://www.facebook.com/profile.php?id=100007751416480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-30570162690012556352016-08-31T19:32:13.049+01:002016-08-31T19:32:13.049+01:00Nice, tight story. Nothing extra but everything t...Nice, tight story. Nothing extra but everything that is here says something.Julie Carpenterhttp://www.sacredchickens.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-65320736875719014322016-06-07T15:20:07.676+01:002016-06-07T15:20:07.676+01:00Excellent imagery and dialogue. I love the creativ...Excellent imagery and dialogue. I love the creative mix of a relationship story within a crime story framework. David Hensonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-51999469996427443342016-06-01T21:21:05.425+01:002016-06-01T21:21:05.425+01:00Left wanting to know what got them here: "She...Left wanting to know what got them here: "She tried to find something beautiful, something to look at in the last moments, but there was nothing." Excellent!Eva Silverfinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12490524228633149661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-81555464962900923382016-06-01T21:20:55.148+01:002016-06-01T21:20:55.148+01:00Left wanting to know what got them here: "She...Left wanting to know what got them here: "She tried to find something beautiful, something to look at in the last moments, but there was nothing." Excellent!Eva Silverfinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12490524228633149661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-33744358279300052742016-05-17T11:23:20.423+01:002016-05-17T11:23:20.423+01:00The writing is well done, with a sad ending. Why d...The writing is well done, with a sad ending. Why do they do they hate each other, I wonder...Glenn Mcnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-86523398533365949292016-04-12T12:45:01.488+01:002016-04-12T12:45:01.488+01:00 Great story and beautifully concise. Great story and beautifully concise.Anne Goodwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04184575753612760952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-43939167220138167182016-04-10T01:06:24.476+01:002016-04-10T01:06:24.476+01:00I could totally picture this scene in my mind. It...I could totally picture this scene in my mind. It would look amazing visually on film! Great job! Keep up the great work!Priscilla B.https://www.blogger.com/profile/08791788788763659318noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-8619917820699066052016-04-06T08:29:46.856+01:002016-04-06T08:29:46.856+01:00Great, tight writing with abraded nerves running r...Great, tight writing with abraded nerves running right through it. Fabulous profiling of petty criminals finally getting in over their heads in a world characterised by mutual loathing and hopelessness. Well done,<br />Ceinwen<br />Ceinwen<br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11145727006327466838noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-30109577860575392272016-04-05T14:40:55.075+01:002016-04-05T14:40:55.075+01:00A cautionary tale. Think and then think again bef...A cautionary tale. Think and then think again before you where you can't come back. Well done.Doughttps://sites.google.com/site/aberrantword/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-10097902608530128352016-04-05T14:08:34.035+01:002016-04-05T14:08:34.035+01:00Their grit and candor make you want to know more. ...Their grit and candor make you want to know more. Good story.Nancy Lanenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-62429126674629678142016-04-05T12:51:45.269+01:002016-04-05T12:51:45.269+01:00Great story, full of tension, desperation and seed...Great story, full of tension, desperation and seediness.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15478828134931082310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-80249047784139661652016-04-05T09:50:07.812+01:002016-04-05T09:50:07.812+01:00this is an excellent story, hard boiled, totally c...this is an excellent story, hard boiled, totally credible characters, atmospheric and tense. `a cheap hotel and a death sentence`, film noirish!<br /><br />Mike McCAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com