tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post237614925492789096..comments2024-03-28T16:06:50.879+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: Judgement Day by James RumpelCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-65833777475523558172022-12-07T11:46:49.431+00:002022-12-07T11:46:49.431+00:00James Rumpel’s “Judgement Day” is a bit of futuris...James Rumpel’s “Judgement Day” is a bit of futuristic whimsey inspired,, no doubt, by millennials forever inhabiting their parents’ basements and amounting to little. The hook was the absolute dread with which the characters regarded their birthday, prompting visions of The Hunger Games or any of several stories—including one by Asimov—involving the character’s survival—or not—on a significant birthday. In keeping with James’s style, the conclusion is a satirical—but happier—one. As with James’s other work, his timing and pacing is impeccable. Good job, James.Bill Topenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-53380612510933643602022-01-05T18:49:53.112+00:002022-01-05T18:49:53.112+00:00Interesting. It kept me reading to find out what w...Interesting. It kept me reading to find out what would happen--always a sign of a successful story. I wouldn't mind reading a more detailed version of this, something that goes into the back story of this world the characters inhabit.Michael Hallerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05385835481152800181noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-90194169898031499892021-12-01T00:21:13.945+00:002021-12-01T00:21:13.945+00:00A funny rite of passage. Now if they could only ge...A funny rite of passage. Now if they could only get married. Edward Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07490305499236322340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-68748339995050657192021-10-20T16:56:31.454+01:002021-10-20T16:56:31.454+01:00Fun story, Judgement Day...the parents all hope ev...Fun story, Judgement Day...the parents all hope everyone is going to pass...I like the slacker character..remaining in childhood dependency another year.Harrison Kimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06747310376412907313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-91983847360699298032021-10-19T13:59:55.720+01:002021-10-19T13:59:55.720+01:00I agree with the previous comments, the dialogue a...I agree with the previous comments, the dialogue and structure of your story are compelling. Good pacing, strong build up of suspense as to what this great sacrifice is all about, with a surprising and clever ending. Well done, James. Lara Hahnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12715504629919475236noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-69905152261115478982021-10-18T03:24:51.612+01:002021-10-18T03:24:51.612+01:00OMG that's wonderful. Super build up, great d...OMG that's wonderful. Super build up, great detail and dialog. The conclusion is handled with such an economy of words that it stayed in front of me mentally the entire way. Just terrific. David Lanverthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02047128645776257464noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-23808204236237885372021-10-17T14:37:58.022+01:002021-10-17T14:37:58.022+01:00I wondered where this was headed. A clever and bit...I wondered where this was headed. A clever and biting satire. David Hensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13683380054995884030noreply@blogger.com