tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post3397571005788578894..comments2024-03-28T16:06:50.879+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: Raw Concrete by Brooke FieldhouseCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-9636594595928006822018-05-12T02:08:45.901+01:002018-05-12T02:08:45.901+01:00Oh, yes. I felt swallowed whole. "The bunker ...Oh, yes. I felt swallowed whole. "The bunker has an insidious internal movement of its own. Its aggregates, particles, Portland, are all are in motion and working at their own rate." Made me think of a snapping turtle. They bury themselves in oxygen rich mud to hibernate in fall -only the shell protruding. Your bunker made me feel as though I was entombed inside one of those brutish, prehistoric creatures. No thanks! Well done! Mitchell Toewshttp://bit.ly/ProseByToewsnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-72868116376986827762017-11-23T18:45:37.021+00:002017-11-23T18:45:37.021+00:00Thanks all for your helpful comments!
B r o o k eThanks all for your helpful comments!<br />B r o o k eAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17142492723192523556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-23972358086557598522017-11-20T14:07:04.912+00:002017-11-20T14:07:04.912+00:00So much to like here from the opening image to the...So much to like here from the opening image to the Keats ending. The foreshadowing via The Cask of Amontillado and The Canterville Ghost is excellent and the stream-of-conscious panic very effective. Well done !<br />David Hensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13683380054995884030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-8366026449886821242017-11-20T12:55:56.846+00:002017-11-20T12:55:56.846+00:00this is truly atmospheric. the narrator´s attempts...this is truly atmospheric. the narrator´s attempts to remain calm and logical constantly undermined by the almost inevitability of his fate.<br />Excellent!<br />Mike McCAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-45265212328498531022017-11-20T10:19:27.507+00:002017-11-20T10:19:27.507+00:00A well told and frightening story that wears its r...A well told and frightening story that wears its roots in erudition lightly. Not one to read before bedtime ....<br />Many thanks,<br />Ceinwen<br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11145727006327466838noreply@blogger.com