tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post4005259631055548569..comments2024-03-28T08:51:20.299+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: Why Can't They Leave Things Alone? by Harry DowneyCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-15137519114798813912015-05-03T09:45:14.496+01:002015-05-03T09:45:14.496+01:00A clever and humorous story about a guy who's ...A clever and humorous story about a guy who's wife had left him. He took over his life and did things his way. Quite an intricate story but most enjoyable to read. We all feel as though someone is watching us, as we go around shops. This story could also be a warning, that you just never know when you can be caught. Even though he got a punishment, the confidence and determination in the character's voice never faltered. Jannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-53101056414499757772014-04-10T17:50:27.428+01:002014-04-10T17:50:27.428+01:00The clipped language and conversational tone of th...The clipped language and conversational tone of the narrator draws the reader in. We go along for the ride and keep reading furiously because of this dynamic. Well done. The irony and sarcasm in the voice you created is not overdone and placed the details of the action are seamless. Humor is always a plus! Enjoyed this one.<br />JamesAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-57442202582067790132014-04-10T03:56:44.950+01:002014-04-10T03:56:44.950+01:00I loved the voice in this. The narrator's tone...I loved the voice in this. The narrator's tone was perfect. I especially love his professional pride. The circumstances were delicious and funny...and quite believable. <br /><br />--Wendy Hammer Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-72790996663759865262014-04-09T22:25:17.926+01:002014-04-09T22:25:17.926+01:00I'm not sure I can fully express how much I lo...I'm not sure I can fully express how much I love this story. Really glad I came across it. I laughed so hard I've got tears in my eyes. This is well written to the point that it seems so real and the start was very gripping, it did remind me of an old movie that began with the main actor's wife leaving him for a midget. The writing style is great as well.Ethan Regalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14064777162768802306noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-41265530810462830352014-04-04T18:00:48.707+01:002014-04-04T18:00:48.707+01:00Very good story. Wish I had written it!
Very good story. Wish I had written it!<br />Ed Nicholsnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-59438527672107194842014-04-04T13:33:43.442+01:002014-04-04T13:33:43.442+01:00clever story, liked the feeling sorry for himself,...clever story, liked the feeling sorry for himself, world against me narration, like Tim I feel it did sound very convincing<br /><br />Michael McCarthyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-72227651996160090082014-04-04T03:50:15.734+01:002014-04-04T03:50:15.734+01:00A well-detailed look at a lifestyle--the whole thi...A well-detailed look at a lifestyle--the whole thing had the ring of truth and authenticity. I love that his wife left him for a used car dealer and that's how we are really introduced to who he is. Enjoyed it very much.Tim Macynoreply@blogger.com