tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post4806070484639985963..comments2024-03-28T16:06:50.879+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: A Bouquet of Daisies by Robert LevinCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-61554634734553875032016-06-15T14:31:31.676+01:002016-06-15T14:31:31.676+01:00A rather disconcerting story in that it treats a c...A rather disconcerting story in that it treats a clearly abnormal relationship as being run-of-the-mill. Nevertheless it was thought-provoking and extremely well written.<br />Beryl. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-54651763634341761942016-06-14T10:35:01.900+01:002016-06-14T10:35:01.900+01:00this well written story reads to me a bit like a t...this well written story reads to me a bit like a true crime report, because it has a ring of truth about it, I feel. the characters are nicely detailed with their weaknesses and problems. it made me think about it after I´d read it which I feel is a good sign.<br /><br />Mike McC<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-9929662220805359892016-06-14T01:46:58.302+01:002016-06-14T01:46:58.302+01:00Interesting omniscient narration. Another reader m...Interesting omniscient narration. Another reader mentioned Warhol, but it reminded me of a Woody Allen film, with the feel of something from the 70's. Anyway it hooked me to the end. Quite a train wreck and a disturbing ending.Chris Wighthttp://www.leisuremaximus.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-73522518648146068192016-06-13T22:50:50.733+01:002016-06-13T22:50:50.733+01:00This is a very interesting story that produces a s...This is a very interesting story that produces a startling result. It certainly gives pause to the couple's thought process. The piece was carefully and well written.<br /><br />I would like to see a better progression of their relationship, perhaps with less detail. Also, I think more dialog . . . hearing from them . . . would be helpful, instead to the narrator's conclusions.<br /><br />Early on, Ann Marie doesn't know he exists. I'd like a better understanding of why she almost at once has feelings for him. . . perhaps through her own words.<br /><br />Likewise, I feel we deserve to learn Walter's thought process before he does the deed.<br /><br />Most enjoyable! Thank you. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00123442894702084804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-61146006262864793952016-06-13T12:19:47.842+01:002016-06-13T12:19:47.842+01:00Andy Warhol would have loved this one. The action ...Andy Warhol would have loved this one. The action of the narrative has been three times removed from the reader; i) the narrator - or ‘thrice removed’ as this particular narrator might say, who incidentally talks rather like an over-wordy member of the British aristocracy – but relax, because you’re clearly in expert literary hands, ii) the journalists/presenters who have prepared the news items, iii) the protagonists Walter, and Anna – and by ‘eck she is a strange‘un. The intimate details make me wonder as to whether the narrator is actually Walter?<br />B r o o k e<br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17142492723192523556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-69448994095429160132016-06-13T10:20:22.124+01:002016-06-13T10:20:22.124+01:00An bold account of a deeply unhealthy relationship...An bold account of a deeply unhealthy relationship. The dynamics were interesting but I felt that I wanted more than the 'press/media coverage' and reported anecdotes offered - to get a deeper sense of Walter and Anna Marie and indeed of the prurient narrator as well. I wonder if the ideas cold be developed into a longer narrative? <br />Many thanks,<br />CeinwenAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11145727006327466838noreply@blogger.com