tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post5682729747170242120..comments2024-03-29T12:58:34.121+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: The Giant Worm by Frank BeyerCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-91704339177760223082023-04-11T04:40:27.576+01:002023-04-11T04:40:27.576+01:00Thanks Bill!Thanks Bill!Frankhttps://www.febeyer.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-22149155752528442312023-04-11T04:38:02.340+01:002023-04-11T04:38:02.340+01:00Thanks Bill!Thanks Bill!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-39743421831020474242023-02-01T08:54:03.631+00:002023-02-01T08:54:03.631+00:00The staccato narration is effective, as if the MC ...The staccato narration is effective, as if the MC were reading off the inside of his skullcap. (Was that statement too weird?). I’ve known homeless people and Frank’s right: the really down and out are cloaked in a death-like odor. Essentially, they are reduced to the basics: alcohol and other drugs, food enough to live, and despair. Nice job, Frank.Bill Topenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-11681080094556749192020-08-05T20:56:38.882+01:002020-08-05T20:56:38.882+01:00So evocative for all the senses. Nice job!So evocative for all the senses. Nice job!Heather Rhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00546643095232533031noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-39452834779614364882020-06-15T19:18:06.573+01:002020-06-15T19:18:06.573+01:00So much conveyed is such a short story. Very nicel...So much conveyed is such a short story. Very nicely done.James Rumpelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10983186433099791617noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-69178056151496264162020-06-10T02:10:54.764+01:002020-06-10T02:10:54.764+01:00Certainly there could be more of this in the futur...Certainly there could be more of this in the future. But the descent into solitude, desperation, addiction and/or despair have been with us since caveman days. I do have some hope that this character can get on his feet again.Frank Beyernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-19544157927088552892020-06-09T22:40:16.984+01:002020-06-09T22:40:16.984+01:00I based this character on what I saw of the homele...I based this character on what I saw of the homeless in Sao Paulo, Brazil some years back. The worst I've come to is sleeping in my car for about ten nights. From talking to people, and again observation, a big thing about being homeless is how constantly uncomfortable it is. I used some personal issues with guilt to round the character out somewhat. I also wanted to give the impression that this guy could be a good person or a bad person - maybe his flexibility in this puts him more towards the bad?Frank Beyernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-6138863013229338182020-06-09T21:17:36.573+01:002020-06-09T21:17:36.573+01:00Really convincing character. I'm curious how ...Really convincing character. I'm curious how you were able to summon him up. Been on the street yourself, or just an observer?Patrick Ritterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16235970043155752374noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-19893532199093857972020-06-09T20:13:11.505+01:002020-06-09T20:13:11.505+01:00Eat. Stink. Drink. I like the metered voice, the v...Eat. Stink. Drink. I like the metered voice, the voice of pain. Seems he has a ways to go to really hit bottom yet. Has a vaguely dystopian or near-future feel, but probably society has already crumbled this far.Chris Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13435037314612068333noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-15359565971401278692020-06-09T19:00:27.876+01:002020-06-09T19:00:27.876+01:00Tough way to live. The character is approaching a ...Tough way to live. The character is approaching a point of no return in his struggle of survival vs. decency...hanging on by a thread. And, sadly, it would seem he's one of the luckier ones.Ron Schultehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05058258071909410778noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-79235576493494685962020-06-08T23:47:54.766+01:002020-06-08T23:47:54.766+01:00Wow! Powerful - "with fear and indifference.&...Wow! Powerful - "with fear and indifference." This is a thoughtful look inside homelessness. Thank you, Frank, for crafting a superb, thought-provoking portrait.Nancy Lanenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-63739221494166888252020-06-08T22:50:34.337+01:002020-06-08T22:50:34.337+01:00Good job of inhabiting the character. Very believa...Good job of inhabiting the character. Very believable... and sad. David Hnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-566364891335659512020-06-08T18:20:43.062+01:002020-06-08T18:20:43.062+01:00Very descriptive and absorbing story that tells it...Very descriptive and absorbing story that tells it like it is for this street person and does not sentimentalize. The protagonist is basically alone with his demons, full of resentment at the lucky people who did not succumb to addiction, later regretting giving in to aggression. He is still not completely lost but close to it. I like how its hinted at how was before he became a street person. Harrison Kimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06747310376412907313noreply@blogger.com