tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post6170909239855543761..comments2024-03-29T12:58:34.121+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: The Journey to Hell by Rosemary Johnson Charlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-1283812856904386402020-12-09T12:45:14.859+00:002020-12-09T12:45:14.859+00:00Thank you all for your comments. I found this sto...Thank you all for your comments. I found this story unsettling to write, because of the intensity, I suppose. I'm glad it resonated.Rosemary Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05797123703252258773noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-88448313861178393902020-12-08T13:55:28.185+00:002020-12-08T13:55:28.185+00:00Purity's terror was well-executed...a slow bur...Purity's terror was well-executed...a slow burn of mounting anxiety as she becomes more and more aware of her fate. Makes me wonder if she would have had the courage to escape if she hadn't been paired specifically with her mother's husband...seemed like that was the tipping point in her decision.Ron Schultehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05058258071909410778noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-26741929431692081362020-12-08T02:51:27.216+00:002020-12-08T02:51:27.216+00:00There's a lot going on in this story. Purity w...There's a lot going on in this story. Purity was brought up within Community but managed to maintain her individuality and sense of right and wrong. Thanks for sharing your story with us.James Rumpelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10983186433099791617noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-84906678146341518382020-12-07T23:10:32.346+00:002020-12-07T23:10:32.346+00:00Sounds like a story from the Bountiful commune her...Sounds like a story from the Bountiful commune here in Canada. A number of books have been written about this place by women who left. I also felt sorry for Verity. Ashley T Berger described very well.Harrison Kimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06747310376412907313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-805666195512215372020-12-07T20:28:08.093+00:002020-12-07T20:28:08.093+00:00Good job addressing an unsettling topic. Some sen...Good job addressing an unsettling topic. Some sentences seemed a bit wordy, but good descriptions overall.Patrick Ritterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16235970043155752374noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-13431243558726088442020-12-07T19:15:20.175+00:002020-12-07T19:15:20.175+00:00A powerful and believable story. Purity exhibits h...A powerful and believable story. Purity exhibits heroic bravery. I have much sympathy for Verity, less for the mother (though her joining and staying with the cult is made understandable). David Hensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13683380054995884030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-55903372002003678992020-12-07T16:33:31.955+00:002020-12-07T16:33:31.955+00:00A moving tale. I grew up in a not dissimilar commu...A moving tale. I grew up in a not dissimilar commune/community (Reba Place Fellowship in Evanston, a Chicago suburb). Though less reclusive, it went through a greedy cult phase. Its virgins (called "single people") were a lower class. Always embarrassed me to be associated. Anyway, that's why this story affected me. I'm glad she was able to escape, as I was, but would have liked to see more revenge exacted on the elders.Chris Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13435037314612068333noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-11635019530508244842020-12-07T12:41:43.329+00:002020-12-07T12:41:43.329+00:00Hmmm, I commented as bluesky with my Google accoun...Hmmm, I commented as bluesky with my Google account (see above). I didn't mean to do that, I don't want to be anonymous or hidden. sorry!Roger Haydonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-70523018213600327312020-12-07T11:55:41.526+00:002020-12-07T11:55:41.526+00:00The level of explicit detail makes it work well, i...The level of explicit detail makes it work well, it's claustrophobic and terrifying. Could have left out ""I start walking. On the way to hell" at the very end however.Roger Haydonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16817829726271600585noreply@blogger.com