tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post6883105580991946325..comments2024-03-28T16:06:50.879+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: The Bad Positive by Feyisayo AnjorinCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-274075133093597492023-05-21T10:00:49.573+01:002023-05-21T10:00:49.573+01:00“The Bad Positive” is a snapshot of the nightmare ...“The Bad Positive” is a snapshot of the nightmare many people have endured over the possibility of being infected with a virus that at one time was almost a death sentence. Cruelly, it was tied to sexual activity, which for some was the defining element of their personality, their very existence. They have been many Banjos, and not a few Yomis, throughout the ages. I’m not certain who the narrator was, but the premise and the execution of the story was very good.Bill Topenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-18810062158924331312014-11-18T10:04:21.225+00:002014-11-18T10:04:21.225+00:00Being HIV positive is definitely a bad positive. T...Being HIV positive is definitely a bad positive. This guy eventually faces his fears and finds out his status. Beyond the story I wonder if this character can indeed carry out the change he has in mind. Well done.<br /><br />James WenthworthAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-48147129950581028732014-11-17T20:36:24.164+00:002014-11-17T20:36:24.164+00:00Simple story, not a simplistic one though.
Nadine...Simple story, not a simplistic one though.<br /><br />Nadine BothaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-764727523035600542014-10-03T13:16:55.547+01:002014-10-03T13:16:55.547+01:00The alliteration of the 'L' sound in the o...The alliteration of the 'L' sound in the opening got me hooked straight away. Brilliantly used 2nd person. I think this point of view helped the reader identify with this awful character, e.g. 'You particularly hated the beautiful ones who sold themselves too cheap' - Well done! Enjoyed this! <br /><br />Charlotte Hayden Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-31205751137355912472014-10-02T11:15:33.916+01:002014-10-02T11:15:33.916+01:00Good plot, psychological conflict, and an unexpect...Good plot, psychological conflict, and an unexpected resolution, so all boxes well and truly ticked, but as for the outcome, utterly unconvincing!...Banjy-wangy - bless his little cotton socks - is a pathological Moma's Little Chauvinist, and a 'phewey' over an HIV test isn't going to make him change his ways!<br />As for writing; a great use of second person gives it a timeless feel.<br /><br />BrookeAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17142492723192523556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-13454129535633232372014-10-02T08:18:06.995+01:002014-10-02T08:18:06.995+01:00A very good story keeping the reader guessing unti...A very good story keeping the reader guessing until the very last. It also contained an important message; and gave hope to those infected with HIV that it wasn't necessarily the end of their lives. Well-written and convincing.<br />BerylAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-62162907221189807742014-10-01T13:47:31.887+01:002014-10-01T13:47:31.887+01:00A powerful use of the second person as if a friend...A powerful use of the second person as if a friend was speaking to him or perhaps as if Banjo is talking to himself in mirror. I feel Banjo is trying to convince himself of something which often is a reason one talks to him/herself. And in the end, he does even in the face of uncertainty doubting where the truth lies, yet having to act nevertheless. A very convincing and worthwhile portrait.<br /><br />James ShafferAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-64757895023063635492014-09-30T19:36:28.789+01:002014-09-30T19:36:28.789+01:00A morality tale - without being preachy or relying...A morality tale - without being preachy or relying on hackneyed formulas. Characters emerged from the page with their human strengths and flaws, making a dynamic tapestry: misfortune laced with a humour that made the emergent story even more poignant. A pleasure to read, thank you,<br /><br />Ceinwen HaydonAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-72780071116812019782014-09-30T16:12:53.052+01:002014-09-30T16:12:53.052+01:00Not what I expected at all, and pleasantly so. The...Not what I expected at all, and pleasantly so. The second person POV works well here, another unexpected pleasure. Nicely done!Jim Bartletthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03429957545169700110noreply@blogger.com