tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post8050664585695576703..comments2024-03-28T16:06:50.879+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: Deal by Doug HawleyCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-29742271879422167192023-05-26T12:00:10.077+01:002023-05-26T12:00:10.077+01:00Hi Doug. I agreed with everyone’s comments but the...Hi Doug. I agreed with everyone’s comments but the first one. I thought the story was thoughtful and poignant and reflective of the time in which we live. What more could one want?Bill Topenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-59212885078769363672020-08-06T17:38:05.937+01:002020-08-06T17:38:05.937+01:00That was an enjoyable snacking of words.
Could I ...That was an enjoyable snacking of words.<br /><br />Could I take Sally back if we were married? I dunno, maybe.<br /><br />A shame about Maureen but that's a nice solid that he did for his brother.<br /><br />Does Jenny have to get away with it?<br /><br />Any chance of Jenny getting her comeuppance?<br /><br />And I didn't see Sally coming back so that was a nice surprise for me.<br /><br />Good job. Charles Petriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08552021472390477368noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-56136344236485917242015-03-21T15:34:06.618+00:002015-03-21T15:34:06.618+00:00Thanks for the comments. My wife asked me to do m...Thanks for the comments. My wife asked me to do more cooking and I asked if it was because she was leaving me. Thus began a story idea. I can make peanut butter sandwiches, a constant in my life for 60 some years, and that is about it.Doug Hawleynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-69356434327018881442015-03-21T10:04:05.554+00:002015-03-21T10:04:05.554+00:00Hi Doug, I enjoyed the moral, an old one, of the s...Hi Doug, I enjoyed the moral, an old one, of the story. I couldn't help but think that Sally missed the warning 'Fred had a room he rent when he didn't want to go home' - hey surely this should have raised alarm bells.<br />If duke had found someone else -would the ending be different?<br /><br />James.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-62785267099901155112015-03-21T08:46:40.964+00:002015-03-21T08:46:40.964+00:00Highly entertaining, very realistic - and at the e...Highly entertaining, very realistic - and at the end, a salutory lesson. We're all inclined to think that life has more to offer than we've got, until something happens to make us take a second look and realise that what we have is pretty good. I enjoyed your story hugely. Your writing has a natural rhythm too. Well done.<br />All the best,<br />Beryl.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-3070739375618099912015-03-21T06:00:46.966+00:002015-03-21T06:00:46.966+00:00Hi Doug,
I absolutlely agree with you, the 'fi...Hi Doug,<br />I absolutlely agree with you, the 'fingers crossed' bit in my review was what the reader is left with at the close of the story, and it is that lingering 'I wonder if' is so compelling - after all Duke and Sally's intentions are clear but their fate still remians to be decided? Can they make it work? Thank you again for a good piece,<br />Best wishes,<br />Ceinwen<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-69357624674667388122015-03-21T01:03:01.422+00:002015-03-21T01:03:01.422+00:00Another pub passed and disagreed with Duke taking ...Another pub passed and disagreed with Duke taking Sally back. No way I would change the ending. He still loved her and had no other options.Doug Hawleynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-69511365810189330152015-03-20T17:37:58.571+00:002015-03-20T17:37:58.571+00:00A straight and honest story - the grass always app...A straight and honest story - the grass always appears greener? The tom tom beat of the craziness of relationships beats through this piece: fingers crossed that they will get back together - or at least remain friends? Thank you,<br />CeinwenAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com