tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post8505309242807565..comments2024-03-28T16:06:50.879+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: Luxury Suite by Gabriel FranklinCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-2211925587859021832014-09-11T11:46:01.305+01:002014-09-11T11:46:01.305+01:00A great distinct voice by the protagonist here, ev...A great distinct voice by the protagonist here, even if I didn't particularly like his naughty ways! Great story.<br /><br />Charlotte Hayden Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-67636114451944701092014-09-04T16:36:39.294+01:002014-09-04T16:36:39.294+01:00I really liked the concept of this story. I think ...I really liked the concept of this story. I think it is very true that the power of saints and demons over humanity has greatly diminished because humans frankly just aren't all that impressed with them any more and are much more concerned about our iPods and so forth. I did find the story hard to follow at points with the jumping POV. There also were instances of the tense shifting from past to present. It might help if less of the story was told as the internal thoughts of the main characters and instead communicated through actual dialog/action.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06903782303735575143noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-34408643288799367132014-09-04T13:24:13.446+01:002014-09-04T13:24:13.446+01:00Imaginative ideas; a sharp businessman trapped for...Imaginative ideas; a sharp businessman trapped for eternity inside a gold pendant, Nigel's 'food' being contaminated with electronics, drugs, propaganda...Tuneful phrases such as, '...lost for hours in a prodigious fichus.' <br /> In spite of the well-ordered POV I still found it difficult to identify which protagonist was speaking, but that's perhaps the real subtlety of this piece, and why 'rocker' don't have name...they both Nigel.<br /><br />Brooke FieldhouseAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-74795803546510538942014-09-02T19:22:57.697+01:002014-09-02T19:22:57.697+01:00A fresh reworking of the Faustian story. You sell...A fresh reworking of the Faustian story. You sell your soul to the Devil. But the rocker has a chance at redemption. Nice. I wonder what the downside is when you make a deal with God? I hope the rocker read the fine print. <br /><br />James Shaffer Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-21321342516644874442014-09-02T16:11:41.097+01:002014-09-02T16:11:41.097+01:00This was a fun read and so many wonderful descript...This was a fun read and so many wonderful descriptions! The reader is treated to word paintings that make a fine portrait. And how can you not like the aging musician? (Interesting touch, by the way, with never giving us his name.) Nicely done.Jim Bartletthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03429957545169700110noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-44482109383499408692014-09-02T09:21:49.318+01:002014-09-02T09:21:49.318+01:00i like this very much, too my mind, original and b...i like this very much, too my mind, original and brilliantly descriptive, but at the same time a new take on an old theme,<br />well done<br /><br />Michael McCarthyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com