tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post8908477625943104359..comments2024-03-29T12:58:34.121+00:00Comments on FICTION on the WEB short stories: Dead Men's Money by Martin GriseCharlie Fishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04834189452905372024noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-6593285705010126032022-04-28T14:21:24.203+01:002022-04-28T14:21:24.203+01:00Great premise and lots of action. The second half...Great premise and lots of action. The second half flowed much more readily and fluidly than the first. I liked this quite a bit but would suggest that it would better if about 20% shorter or so. David Lanverthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02047128645776257464noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-47275420644855792272022-04-25T18:34:57.021+01:002022-04-25T18:34:57.021+01:00I like how the story unfolded, albeit a little une...I like how the story unfolded, albeit a little uneven. I enjoyed the read.Ken Schalhoubhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03125025271952235279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-155197540326010032.post-26198649232503118122022-04-24T03:05:59.274+01:002022-04-24T03:05:59.274+01:00The last one third of the story was very good: ski...The last one third of the story was very good: skillfully written, with good dialogue and excellent plot twists. The trouble was the first two thirds of the fiction, wherein the characters were written as so depraved and so mordantly unlikable that the story was difficult to continue reading. Skillful job, but it was too dark for me.Bill Topehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00216384632458790098noreply@blogger.com